After reviewing the two pieces about essays and also doing all the writing exercises in class today, I've come up with a lot of ways to improve my essay. From the pieces we read for homework, it's pretty clear I should have a lot more focus on exploration and interpretation instead of only focusing on facts.
A lot of the things we read were about how essays should be personal reflections, etc., but that didn't seem to really apply to my essay since mine is a lot more focused on analysis of facts and has a more concrete thesis. However, I do realize that I need to keep in mind that this isn't a 5th grade style 5 paragraph essay (intro point 1 point 2 point 3 conclusion) which I still tend to do a variation of (sometimes something like intro point point counter point point conclusion).
Other things I noticed I need to do are put my paragraphs in a more logical order. A lot of what I say is important and needs to stay, but the essay can get confusing since the paragraphs are not in an order that directly leads into my conclusion.
Also, I think that my thesis in my intro is clear, but the concluding paragraph I have doesn't really connect to that original thesis, so that needs to be fixed up. And one last thing, I'm thinking that after all my persuading essay parts, I should put in a plan-of-action section showing people what needs to be done because of "this this and this" that I outlined in the essay.
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